>>148433
Like, you like? Really need to do what's like, best for you? I know you like? love your sister? But she's loving you like, too much? you know? Tell her how you really feel? and like, maybe she'll understand? Or just like, throw a brick? at her face?

>A touch too rough
>Eyes closed in fear
>A misunderstood love

This is actually pretty ok, needs an ending, but its a nice little couplet. Fear doesnt rhyme with bear though. If your ever get stuck on a rhyme go through the alphabet. Off the top of my head that makes Beer, deer, ear, fear, gear, hear, leer, mere, near, pear, peer, queer, rear, seer, tear, vear, year.

you'll want your next line to be 6 sylables as well, since our first and second are both 4. You should also make it alude to the second line, thematicaly symetrical, if you will, since 1 and 3 are both establishing subjects. Just, you know, reference a body part i guess? "fingers trembling...", or "cheeks hot...", etc.

This is nice, deep, personal, susinct and touching. Your skills have definately improved.

>>148433
If you can't find a good rhyme for a word, change the word. Mess with that second line, while keeping the meaning the same. Use some different words in it.

As for your sister, maybe you can find out if any boys at school have a crush on her. You could ask her friends. Maybe you can like, snoop around on her computer and find their emails so that you can contact them privately.

>>148433
Well I guess part of it could be machochism. Never really considered it, but I'm attracted to strong women and I often find strange things to be attractive. But then I'm a somewhat strange and self destructive person myself.

Well lets see. If you're going to find a girlfriend in the hopes of keeping your sister away then I think you need to find the local emo crowd. Start hanging out with them and try to find a nice girl among them.

Oh and I did some new writefaggotry. This one was something I came up with while going to sleep yesterday. I'm not really sure it came out as I wanted it. Anyway here it is.

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The steadily falling cold November rain had soaked his clothes. He was not feeling cold though. His purpose was all that filled his mind as he walked through the park under the bare branches of the trees.

He had lost everything he cared about. He could not run from them and they would not stop even if he surrendered. He had tried to end it himself but he didn’t have the courage for it.

There was only one way left now. He saw them up ahead in the field. They still hadn’t seen him, the rain masked his approach. He threw himself on one of them. With desperation he clawed, bit, kicked and grappled in the mud. Once he got on top he started raining down punches. The others hit him but nothing made him stop, he was numb to the pain. He could not stop it any longer.

This was what the road had led too. With mounting desperation they tried to pull him off his victim but they had never dealt with someone willing to go this far. He felt a sense of exhilaration he had never felt before. He was no longer helpless, it was they who watched on in mounting fear as he took control.

Then came the sound. A horrible crunching sound followed by the ringing of a metal pipe. His vision went black and he fell forward into the mud. He heard the other scrambling away, they were running away from him. He almost felt like laughing but he couldn’t breathe, there was mud in his face. Slowly turning around he wondered briefly why he hurt so much and at the warm sensation at the back of his head.

The unseeing eyes stared up into the grey clouds. The cold steady rain washed away the blood and mud from the boys face as the broken and battered body of a young boy let out its final sigh.

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There are probably some grammar mistakes there, but the autocorrector should have made sure there are no misspellings. I'm still not sure it gives the picture I intended from the start though. But I guess I won't know what impressions others get from it unless I let other people read it.

>>148433
DAMN BOY YOU FAT

//_emily 2010/03/16(Tue)21:58 No. 148583 ID: f609ed
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Uhhhhhh so like I was browsing? /b/? and like, I found? this thing? I'm pretty sure its like? your sister? I'm thinking? you should still go with the brick? to the face?

>>148583

Please to take this to the discussion thread. Thanks.

>>148585
but it's like? relevant? to this thread? I mean like? what if razor? doesn't like goooo to the discussion board? you know?

>>148583
the writing style mixed with the fact that the sister does not have access to that pic makes it obvious that it is a fake.

razorbladeromance1991!!t0A2VlA2Lj 2010/03/16(Tue)22:28 No. 148591 ID: 950529
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Dear /quest/,

AAAAAAAAAAA!!!!
>>148583
I, like, send that photo to her email. Maybe that's why, like, she wanted to have it so bad? Like, I thought it was weird she wanted pictures of like my injuries? I'm so scared :'(((
i'm sitting in my closet again. This time I'm like really staying until like she's off to school.
What am I gonna do?????

>>148591
Confront her with it. You have justice on your side.

you could try hitting her

>>148591
>>148591

RBR1991 don't pansic! she just might like you and she's trolling b maybe? I hope she's not actually gonna rape you and then kill you and stuff, because you're my new friend and that would be bad.
>>148583
Wow! Emily you go to /tg/! That's awesome! I was hoping someone else could went there, it's so lame now. Blarug.

But RBR, maybe your mom and dad can help? I know I don't talk to mine caz i'm too cool for them, but maybe they can help. if she is a carzy b-person, maybe you can get some help.

>>148595
yeah? like sometimes? I go to /tg/? but I mostly like /fa/? and tgchan?

And maybe? we can help razor? do you have like? a car, razor?

>>148596
Yea! we are so comignt o pick you up! it's gonan be like, a quest! Hey, eheh, I can post here and ask for questions like Ruby!

Where in the us do you live, RBR? I am so coming up to save you! then we can, like, go out and go do some queststuff.

>>148604
He lives in like? The Netherlands?

>>148609
>road trip.

>>148611
>Where in the us do you live, RBR?
>us
>Netherlands

>>148591
You're in the closet again? Hiding won't solve anything. Try talking with your parents. Don't mention the whole molesting angle. But tell them that you're sisters teasing is starting to go over the top and you need them to make her back off a bit.

razorbladeromance1991!!t0A2VlA2Lj 2010/03/17(Wed)11:20 No. 148805 ID: 950529
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Dear /quest/,

Sorry, I like fell asleep in the closet again. So, like, I don't want to hide? but like I'm too scared to go out. She's gone to school now I think tho so I'll get out. I'm like sooooo hungry.
Okay let me like get back to your responses.

>>148593
But, like, I'm like pretty scared of her? Like she's way stronger than me. I'm like not athletic at all, like, i could a bit of a belly and my arms are like way skinny? And she used to do like olympic gymnastics? I dunno what the word is in english. Like she leaped over wooden things and like did handstands and like hung from rings and like did huge jumps? And she did like kickboxing for a while last year but she didn't like, like, getting hit and stuff.
So anyway I dont wanna confront her. Not yet.

>>148594
Like, scroll up, I just responded

>>148595
Okay, like, I'm happy you are like my friend? Cos like, you care? Like, okay I'll text my mom now. Will get back to that when I get like a response.

>>148596
No, like, I dont have a car, but like I have a bicycle and like a public transport pass. I don't even have like a drivers license? :'( Thanks tho

>>148604
So like, I live in the Netherlands tho? Not the US? It's in Europa, next to Germany. But like, thanks for like wanting to help.

>>148609
Like, where do you live? Do you like
live in the US too?

>>148637
Okay like I just send a text. Ill look if I got like a response.
Okay eugh so like I send my mom like "mom christine is taking her teasing too far could you make her stop" and she's like "thomas you're 19 you need to be able to deal with this, when are you going to college to set a good example" EUGH WHATEVER

Okay like, since my sis is out of the house I'll like respond to some of your older responses cos I like got some time?

>>148449
Okay, so like, yeah like, if I divert her attention that'll save me? I'll go check her laptop now.
So like she has a password but like I was like 'thomas' and it worked. Like........ like oh god? The entire desktop is like filled with pictures of me? all her files are pictures of me? like, going back like thre eyears? and some of them are real emberasing. eugh how did she ge


hello again, everyone. it's cookiedough here from thomas's iphone.
you don't have to worry any more. it was all a misunderstanding. me and thomas made up. =3
heres a picture of us hugging. see? everything is fine now. so dont worry or call the cops or anything crazy like that lol x3
now some bad news. thomas dropped his iphone. it broke. he wont be coming online anymore. sorry!
well, i have to go. byebye

>>148805
Obligatory statement of concern. Suspicion concerning circumstances of phone breaking. Implication that subtext exists beneath explicitly stated details.

Overreaction.

>>148805
>it's cookiedough here from thomas's iphone.
>thomas dropped his iphone
uh

>>148805


O_o Uhm.... This is getting into like yandere stuff now.

Really appreciate another update from Razorblade...

>>148805
Yeah I'm gonna be calling the police right about now.

>>148805
Aww he looks so happy and passed out from happiness. Or drugs. Maybe both.

So what are your plans now sweetie?

Well, while I track down your location from the cues you've given so far (that picture of the school should help!)

If by any chance you get away from her, Razor... try to get somewhere safe and call the police. Your sister is obviously mentally disturbed.

//_emily 2010/03/17(Wed)12:03 No. 148818 ID: f609ed
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Like, oh my god? Your sister is like? crazy? you really need? to get away from her? you're like going to get raped?
I like didn't want to say anything? but I live in the Hague? depending on like where? you live? I could probably? come and drive there? I could like beat up your sister? But I'm kind of weak? So like, I'll bring a brick? for her face? Or like? you could like? come to the Hague central station? Thursday? 12 PM? Here's like? a photo of me? so you can like, recognize me? and stuff? hope you can like, get there?

>>148805
Ok, wow. This has gone too far.

Does anybody know a recipe for a kind of mild acid that Thomas could mix together out of household chemicals and use in self defense if he had to?

>>148819
like, ammonia and bleach? but like not the anime?

>>148818
My god, you're perfect for him.

>>148820
We don't want to like, kill her! Jesus. Ammonia and bleach makes, like, deadly fumes and shit.

>>148818

Like o my weeney beeney

Proceed...

>>148823
Yeah? I know? But he like, wanted? self defense aids? He could always just like? grab a kitchen knife?

>>148838
Pepper spray, mayhaps. I don't know what kinda money our dear emo has available to him, but it's not like that's hard to keep track of. Or a tazer.

Whatever, we're counting on you to save our adorable poet, Emily!

>>148849
Hot sauce and alcohol in a small spray bottle.

>>148849
Like because of your response? I decided he has to like? write a poem? for me?

>>148838
I was going to suggest getting a knife, but decided on acid because, as has been previously stated, we don't want this situation to get all murder on us.

SirTen!!H3AwAzMwMw 2010/03/18(Thu)02:49 No. 149117 ID: a7a85a
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>>148818


You know what to do.

RBR! ar joo ok? I not hear from you, and you could be rapeds! I want to make sure you're ok, and not deaded! please reply? Come on man~!

//_emily 2010/03/24(Wed)19:35 No. 151584 ID: 18b69f
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Hey everyone, it's //_emily! Razor like, made it? to the train station? He's fine? he'll like talk to you after I do? Anyway? Sorry it took so long to like? Reply? But like? His iPhone just got fixed? So we can like, reply now? But we wanted to like, post this picture? of us?

We've been like? Really busy these past two weeks? Like, uhm? Since I live on my own? I had to work a bit more to help pay for more food? and stuff? But like? I work at my family's bakery? So they're letting him work there too? For now? Or for however long? So like, he can raise some money on his own? so he can like, live on his own?

We've had like? A lot of fun together? We like? like to go hang out at this park nearby? And see movies together? and other stuff? So like, yeah?

Also, so far like? his sister hasn't found him? Or his blog? So yeah?

>>148821
He is, like? pretty cute, huh?

>>149117
Uhm? Like put butter? on him?

~Okay? So like? Now Razor is going to post in a few minutes?

overuse of 'like' is mindfucking me...

anyway... plans first...

she posted from the i-phone, so she may find it through the username and stuff...

so she can show up any minute...
maybe she already has.


Either way, he needs to lay low for a while... He really did looked drugged before, so a drug test is in order... As in, his sis may have given him a roofie or something...

>>151590
Well it's been a week. I think if he was drugged he's fine by now.

razorbladeromance1991#666 Suggestion 2010/03/24(Wed)23:21 No. 151692 ID: 950529
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Dear /quest/,

It's me, razorbladeromance1991! Like, hey! It's been, like, so long. Like two weeks? Like, thanks for all your advice and stuff cuz like, I got to meet up with emily and like, she let me live in her apartment? And like, it's like, two weeks and it's pretty nice? To be away from home. But like now my mommmmm cut my allowance cuz she thinks I should get my own job. And like, my sister, shes like playing dumb and wishing me luck and stuff. You think shes gonna try to track me down? Cuz thats pretty scary?
Like when she found me on her laptop she like beat me and tied me up and stuff and then she like broke ii-kun but then she went to school and like cuz i cut myself the ropes didnt hurt much so I could free myself? so like I got on the family pc and saw your suggestions and stuff so I went to den haag centraal and stuff. I just got my ii--kun back from the repairman.
So, like wow! This wouldnt have like happened with out you? Like, it was scary but like, im glad that, like, i managed to escape? Before it got worse? ( how?? )
Anyway im pretty happy here but like I think emily doesnt want me to live here forever lol and like i work at her familys bakery now but like I should get my own job and place? Also maybe I should go to school? Cuz like I hate college but like emily goes to this artschool the Koninklijke Akademie voor Beeldende Kunst, where she studies fashion and stuff, so like, I guess I could go study art too? Cuz like I sometimes draw a bit? I could show you cuz emily has a scanner. here's the website, it also has english www.kabk.nl
Okay so like, please help me out, like, I gotta find a job where they will acept me and my paina nd like maybe sign up for college? but I dunno what classes to take? also, like, I should like thank emily? like we're prety good friends in 2 weeks, eventhough like shes punk emo and im goth emo, we stil get along prety well. So like, just, like, help me out again thanks.
PS what to do about my sister? like, you raly think she'll come after me? what do?
Thanks, ilu all

Love <4
Razorbladeromance1991

>>151692
Listen here, Razor!

Keep Emmers nearby at all times, and strive to not be alone. Should sis arrive, do not, I repeat, DO NOT BE ALONE WITH HER. All her abuse has been perpetrated when the two of you were alone, so that there would be no or little proof.
Should she come again, be absolutley certain to call her out on it. Apologies won't work now, she's driven you from home, broken your property, and scared the fuck out of you. You've given her a second chance, she doesn't deserve another. Call the police, press charges, so on and so forth, should she hurt you again.

Sibling love is a beautiful thing... but she doesn't love you. She wants you. She doesn't care, clearly, how you feel in this situation. So it's not love anymore.

You sure you're okay, man? Those look like tear tracks, and you're putting a lot of effort into covering your neck.

>>151692
Why do you keep saying 'two weeks'? Your last post was on the 17th, and now it's the 24th so that's 7 days. One week.

Heyyy, when did you get that lip piercing?

I don't think your sister is crazy enough to come after you but you should get some kind of protection. Have you told your parents or the police about her?

>>151732
Like? That's his make up? He hasn't been like? Too depressed here? You know?
>>151936
Like? His iPhone has like, that uh? word thinger on it? where it decides words? So I think it was like? a typo?

>>151692
Okay so you want a job right?

How about a job at a bookstore? That seems about your speed.

Just as planned...